The Basics of Self-Editing
I’ve edited a few things over the years; actually, I’ve edited a lot of things, even if my name isn’t on most of them. In that time, I’ve found there are some common mistakes that continue to crop up each time I forget myself and get dragged back into working on someone else’s Magnum Opus. I thought I’d put these together in a
not so brief piece to help other budding authors avoid some of the more common technical pitfalls. Keep in mind that none of this addresses issues of structure, plot consistency, themes, or voice. Even if you’ve found a unique way to tell a story.
All of this, everything that follows, is just a guideline. Never let technical correctness muffle your writers’ voice. Don’t assume every editors’ suggestion needs to be embraced. And remember that none of this is a substitute for a skilled
Masochist Concept Editor and a cohort of Victims Beta Readers.
Do NOT edit while you are still writing. Once you get to the end of your section take a break and don’t immediately go back over it. You, the writer, know what you’re trying to say, but the reader doesn’t. Or as a great writer once scrawled in a shaking hand, “Write drunk. Edit sober.” Until you put some distance (time & emotion) between yourself and the work, you will only see it through your filter as a writer.
Watch out for repetitive word use in the same sentence or paragraph. This can be particularly tricky when you are being technical in your writing. The more uncommon the word is, the more your repetition of its use will stand out to a reader. The more common a word, the more its repetition will bore your reader (such as repetitive for example). Try to keep a careful balance between clarity of meaning and precision of word use.
Show don’t tell
Don’t tell people what characters think, show it.
Don’t explain an emotional response like you’re diagnosing a disease, but show the physiological reactions.
Don’t tell the reader what to think and feel, make them think it or feel it.
Keep in mind that every story needs a balance of showing and telling. Relying too heavily on either method can ruin a reader’s experience.
“Show, don’t tell” is the advice that every writer gets, the advice that promotes description in place of narration. It’s also the advice that can destroy a writer’s voice and ruin a cleverly constructed sequence. So show where you can, narrate where you must, and preserve the flow of your story.
Don’t write a novel like it’s an essay
Opening a sentence with “At this point…” “Meanwhile…” can add some interesting tone to your voice as a writer, but make sure it doesn’t turn your paragraph into a laundry list of actions instead of a scene. Which leads on to ‘danger words’.
Also known as plague words, because you need to avoid them like the plague. There are lots of words in the English language that are good solid words, cornerstones of communication without which we couldn’t express ourselves. At the same time when they appear to regularly in your work they may be highlighting a problem;
- Really / Very (and other intensifiers): These are crutch words that have no descriptive value. Eliminate entirely or replace with a descriptive word. As Mark Twain famously said, “Substitute ‘damn’ every time you’re inclined to write ‘very’; your editor will delete it and the writing will be just as it should be.”
- He / She: If every sentence starts with ‘He’ and ‘She’, it not only bores the reader but suggests you are telling rather than showing.
- I: (see 3rd person dialogue below)
- Was / Is / Are / Am: These sometimes highlight the presence of the passive voice. If you don’t understand the difference between active and passive voice you need to leave this page right now and do your homework before you get back into the writing. (pro-tip) use the Zombies check, but keep in mind that the passive voice isn’t always the problem people seem to think.
- Feel / Believe / Think: Outside dialogue, such words are unnecessary, we already know you feel/believe/think this otherwise you wouldn’t be writing about it.
- Just: The word doesn’t add any real value to sentences. Leaving it out often results in the same meaning and makes the sentences much tighter and more direct.
- Got / Went: Lazy and imprecise. There is nearly always a better action word you can substitute, one that gives more nuanced meaning to your work.
- Then: Then is my personal bugbear, then turns an action sequence into a shopping list of dot point actions.
Then points vaguely to the existing timeline and says, “It was after that last thing I talked about.” But the new action taking place in a subsequent sentence or sentence part implies that much already. You can almost always eliminate your thens without disrupting meaning or flow.
“Then” should be used as a clarifying agent, to communicate that two seemingly concurrent actions are happening in sequence. For example, “I drove to the supermarket. Then I realized I didn’t need to buy anything.” Without the “then,” it would be easy to mistake this as pre-existing knowledge or as a realization that happened during the drive itself.
– Robbie Blair
Generally, avoid meaningless words and fillers, unnecessary adverbs, and where it doesn’t ruin the flow of your story you can sometimes place adverbs within the verb.
Then the solution can be discarded. vs The solution can then be discarded.
The blood is withdrawn slowly. vs The blood is slowly withdrawn.
Avoid 3rd person dialogue
If you are writing from the third person perspective and your characters start talking about themselves in the third person, it just sounds like they’re mentally imbalanced (unless that is your intent). When dialogue reads like the characters are talking about themselves in the third person such as “I have two paths… “I have chosen… “I need to… “I never… “I think… “I think… “I think… then those characters better have a god complex (or an inferiority complex) because normal people don’t feel the need to identify themselves before making every statement. If the people in the room can see you talking, you don’t need to let them know you’re there first. – I’m mentioning this point because it always startles me when I see it happen, and it came up recently for me.
Clearly define your characters
Your characters should all be different, not just little clones of you as an author. Each character should have a purpose and bring something to the work. If they don’t then they’re not characters, they’re plot devices or scenery. If you find you have a problem doing this you may wish to consider writing from a first person perspective.
Look at the number of characters you have, if there are too many see where some overlap and you might be able to merge them into a single individual. This can tidy up your work, give your characters greater depth, and help the reader who no longer needs to track a cast of thousands.
Check your names
I’ve said this before and I’ll say it again, differentiate your names. If your reader can’t easily identify individual characters you may as well not have them. Not just how the names look on the page, but also how they sound when spoken aloud.
You may have put a great deal of thought into your characters. Perhaps you spent hours deliberating over the personality of your protagonist’s and which name best fits them. Maybe you even agonized over the subtle hints that each name provides, the baggage it comes with, and the impression you hope to impart, but to your reader, it’s usually just a name. Sure there can be a certain pleasure for both the reader and the writer in understanding the underlying message of a name, but your clever usage will rarely overcome a reader’s existing bias.
For example, any book I pick up where the character shares the name of an archangel, and if this book hints at the existence of an angelic ancestry… well let’s just say they don’t often inspire glowing reviews. On the other hand, a kick-ass warrior woman called Daisy can at least inspire a smile.
Check your Dialogue
Spoken word regularly breaks grammatical rules. Slang, dialects, and contractions all do to the spoken word what Agincourt did to the life expectancy of french nobility. So don’t trust your automated grammar checker (you are using one aren’t you?) for any spoken word pieces. Instead, get someone to read it aloud. There is no better way to spot jumbled or nonsensical sections.
Perhaps even more importantly make sure each character has their own voice, and that their voice isn’t just yours. Go through each character and make sure that their dialogue stays consistent. A grease monkey who never finished high school shouldn’t sound like an academic giving a lecture and vice versa.
Mix it up (structure-wise)
Vary your sentence length. Variety helps keep the reader engaged. Short, sharp, sentences are ideal for rapid action scenes. Long, run-on sentences strung together by commas and asides are great for those moments of calm and introspective thought. Use different sentence structures. If every sentence begins with the same words or has the same structure (such as the technically correct object => verb => adverb) the pace of the piece will be the same and it will feel very repetitive. Mixing up your sentence types keeps the writing fresh and varied, making it easier to read. Same for paragraphs, they can be of almost any length, from a single sentence to five or more. Paragraphs are meant to give readers breaks and giving them breaks at the exact same time over and over again gets extremely monotonous. A simple beat is boring, just as listening to a dripping tap can drive someone to madness, so mix up the tempo in your writing.
Precision in language usage
I’ve got friends who have grown up with or have readily adapted to, the connectivity of the internet. For them things like grammar and correct spelling are far less important, they argue that as long as the message is clear, who needs all those rules. There may be some point to that, one day we might be writing in emoji’s and L33T and the rules of grammar may have been forgotten. But there is a cost, with a reduction in vocabulary comes a reduction in the nuances that can be conveyed. We think in words, and anything that restricts our word choice also stifles our imaginative potential, it’s a rare person who can conceive of a notion that has not yet been named, and a rarer one still that can then share that notion with others.
What I am trying to say, in my rambling way, is be precise in your use of language. If you have to tell rather than show, don’t use ‘angry’ when you can use words that are more precise and convey a lot more subject. ‘Very Angry’ could be furious (suggesting a near loss of control), fuming (suggesting an internal rage), enraged (suggesting an imminent physical response), Annoyed (suggesting a passing state), exasperated (suggesting the anger derives from some sort of recurrent obstacle), and so on. Correct word use can also go a great way to setting the tone of your story and reinforcing the themes and imagery.
Of course, the flip-side of this is that a Thesaurus is no substitute for understanding the word you are using. Decimate may technically mean ‘to kill 1 in 10’ but that is rarely the common usage.
Mind your metaphors
Some minds don’t accept metaphors, some metaphors don’t translate well for those raised in a different culture, and learners of English as a second language will often struggle with metaphors long after their fluency has met or exceeded a native speaker. Metaphors aren’t bad but think carefully before you use them.
Check for Typos
A typo in your text doesn’t just look unprofessional, it can break the flow of your story and jolt your reader out of your book. We all make typos, and even professionally proofed works will occasionally have an error slip through. Trust your Beta readers, use checking software, and do what you can to minimize those mistakes.Too many errors may alienate a large section of your potential audience.
LAST, but never LEAST
Do NOT expect your work to be perfect. It never will be, which means you’ll never finish. There comes a point when you have to accept that it is ‘good enough’ and you can release it into the world.
PS. Spell check is no substitute for a copy-editor.
PPS. I’m not going to tell you to minimize the passive voice. I have my reasons. Not the least of which, is that everyone else will tell you for me. I’ll also leave structure (order, flow and balance), themes and complimentary word choice, and consistency of spelling, capitalization, and hyphenation for another post. YAY! Won’t that be fun?
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While this article is about script writing, the basics still apply to novels. In particular, no risk = no emotional stakes.
Go and check out the whole thing on John Rogers blog. Link http://kfmonkey.blogspot.co.nz/2005/12/writing-action-scenes.html
I try to avoid politics, politics is that dirty topic that shatters friendships and transforms parties into arguments. Not today however, the status of politics in Australia is almost universally understood across all voters and what they agree on is encapsulated perfectly by this short clip.
There comes a time in every writers life when they sit back and think “get a damned book published already”. For me that time is now.
Given that it has never been easier to self publish, that traditional publishing is more likely to smile favourably upon someone with a bit of a following, it really is an ideal time. Chicken or the egg, do you start with what you think is a polished gem, praying to your deity of choice that a traditional published will pick it up? Do you do it all yourself, get to know the business of publishing as well as the art of writing, and polish as you build your world (and hopefully fan-base).
First things first though, write the damn book. That’s where NaNo comes in. Sit down for a month, give yourself permission to spew forth literary garbage onto the page and write. You’ve only got to write 50,000 words, that half a book before editing out the contradictions and adverbs. Don’t edit, that’s not what nano is for, just write. When you’re done you’ll be halfway there, half of the raw clay you can come back and shape into your masterpiece. Then take a break, work on something else, before coming back to write the other half. Then, and only then, do we edit.
Time-out reading material (in an unrelated genre)? Check!
Supply of Chocolate and/or pastry? Check!
100,000 words should make a light and lean 75,000 to 80,000 word book once you’ve done five or so editing passes across it. Not a bad size for an Urban Fantasy / Modern Fantasy work.
We’ll get to editing later; as long as I’m not sitting in a corner sobbing, looking at my empty screen and eating these words.